Post by Pikachu on Feb 8, 2010 2:49:30 GMT -5
Here is everyone's submissions and my grades. Remember, these grades were only one part of two, so they're not the full. Pichu graded your works as well.
Snorlax's Submission: OTHER (Song)
"Snorlax Got Back"
[Intro]
Oh, my, god. Pichu, look at her butt.
It is so big. *scoff* She looks like,
one of those rocket guys' pokemon.
But, Slowpoke, who understands those rocket guys? *scoff*
They only captured her, because,
she really likes to sleep a lot, 'kay?
I mean, her butt, is just so big.
I can't believe she's just so round,she's like,
out there, I mean - gross. Look!
She's just so ... fat!
[Sir Snores-a-Lot]
I like big butts and I can not lie
You pocket monsters can't deny
That when a girl walks by with a tubby wubby waist
And a round thing in your face
You evolve, wanna pull out your tough
'Cause you notice that path was blocked
Deep in the dreams she's dreaming
It's blocked, Pichu can't stop screaming
Oh Snorlax, I wanna wake you up
And keep on going
My trainer tried to warn me
But that butt you got makes me so horny
Ooh, Rump-o'-smooth-hide
You say you wanna get in my tribe?
Well, use me, use me
'Cause you ain't that average groupie
I've seen them plannin'
To hell with their schemin'
She's sweat, wet,
Got it goin' like a Wabafet
I'm tired of Pokedex
Sayin' Mudkips are the thing
Take the average Mewtwo and ask him that
She gotta pack much back
So, Oddish! (Odd!) Oddish! (Odd!)
Has your Snorlax got the badge? (Odd-ish!)
Tell 'em to use it! (Odd-ish!) Use it! (Odd-ish!)
Use that Cascade badge!
Snorlax got back!
(Snorlax comes from the Kanto Region)
Snorlax got back!
[Sir Snores-a-Lot]
I like 'em round, not small
And when I'm throwin' my ball
I just can't help myself, I'm actin' like a pokemon
Now here's my story-man
I wanna capture you
And ooo, Lugia, ooo, ooo
I ain't talkin' bout Blue Eyes
'Cause Yu-Gi-Oh cards are made for guys
I want 'em real fierce and stealthy
So find that stealthy Doduo
Pikachu's in trouble
Beggin' for a piece of that bubble
So I'm lookin' at rock Pokemon
Rock-type bimbos walkin' like Ho-Ohs
You can have them bimbos
I'll keep my Pokemon like Misty
A word to the thick Snorlaxes, I wanna get with yous
I won't cuss or hit yous
But I gotta be straight when I say I wanna fight
Till the break of dawn
Snorlax got it goin' on
A lot of Meowths won't like this song
'Cause them rockets like to hit it and quit it
And I'd rather stay and fight
'Cause I'm long, and I'm strong
And I'm down to get the battle on
So, Ditto! {Dit!} Ditto! {Dit!}
If you wanna roll in my Pokeball {Dit!}
Then turn into, a Snorlax!
Even Haunter's got to shout
Snorlax got back!
Snorlax got back!
Yeah, Snorlax ... when it comes to monsters, Giovanni ain't got nothin'
to do with my collection. Bulbasaur-Pidgeot-Charmander? Ha ha, only if you're level 3.
[Sir Snores-a-Lot]
So your trainer throws an Abra, playin' mind-tricks on my Seadra
But Seadra ain't got a worry about losing to Abra
My Kadabra don't want none
Unless you've got Golem
You can use Golduck or Mankey,
But please don't use Zubat
Some trainers wanna play Electrode
And tell you that Snorlax ain't gold
So they toss it and leave it
And I pull up quick to retrieve it
So Vulpix says you're fat
Well Jynx ain't down with that!
'Cause your waist is large and your moves are kickin'
And I'm thinkin' bout stickin'
To the good old days in videogames:
You've got Hitmonchans!
Caught me a Koffing, not a Weezing
Body Slam and crunch did miss her
Some team rocket tried to dis
'Cause Snorlax is on my list
She had game and she chose to hit 'em
And I pull up quick to finish 'em
So Snorlax, if the body is round,
And you want a survivor throw down,
Dial 143-SnoresALot (*note: say one forty-three, not one four three)
And kick them nasty punks
Snorlax got back!
Snorlax got back!
(Not little in the middle, Snorlax got back) [4x]
This song represents Snorlax because snorlax really does have back. I mean, HAVE YOU SEEN IT?! lmfao.
Snorlax:
Effort: 25/25
Originality: 8/10
Quality: 4/5
Guidelines: 5/5
Curve: 5/5
Overall: 47/50 Points
I really enjoyed this song, I thought it was veeeerry funny. It most certainly fits Snorlax, and I can tell you put alot of effort into 'Poke-rizing' the song. Don't know how many times I laughed during it/ Only things that dragged down your grade was that it was parody based off an existing song, and I mean, you didn't change the hook too much (Baby got Back to Snorlax got Back. I was sorta expect something a bit different). However, you set the stage for most effort put into the challenge and got a 5 on the curve on being able to parody an entire song, include many different pokemon, apply the theme of the challenge and above all, make it work. It was an awesome submission. Good job.
Vulpix's Submission: OTHER (Song)
We are the team, and we're blasting off
James got his rose in his mouth, need that pikachu that the kids got
that rat's so strong
we would be so awesome
Attila and Hun, Cassidey and Butch
All think they're so great, but we will prove to them now
that we can succeed, we can catch rare pokemon
cause you know we can be...
we're your biggest threat we'll follow you until we catch you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
theres no other pokemon Giovanni wants you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
we might always fail, but we wont stop until our team prevails
pichu doesnt cut it, we'll chase you down until we catch you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
We got costumes, we can fool you with
you never know where we are, we can be right there beside you
you'll never know. Team Rocket will get you now.
That little brat, and his pikachu
have met the end of their days, we'll use our meowth balloon
for our get away, it will surely work this day...
cause Team Rocket will be...
we're your biggest threat we'll follow you until we catch you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
theres no other pokemon Giovanni wants you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
we might always fail, but we wont stop until out team prevails
pichu doesnt cut it, we'll chase you down until we catch you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
Dooooooou...ble trou-ble, thats what we're about.
Surrender now, or prepare to fight
we won't stop, for anyone
We're losers but we still have fun!
we're your biggest threat we'll follow you until we catch you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
theres no other pokemon Giovanni wants you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
we might always fail, but we wont stop until team rocket prevails
pichu doesnt cut it, we'll chase you down until we catch you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
Vulpix
Effort: 25/25
Originality: 7/10
Quality: 4/5
Guidelines: 1/5
Curve: 4/5
Overall: 41/50 Points
Well, the song parodied was Papparazi by Lady Gaga. For a parody, it did a pretty good job. However, you didn't tell how thing song had to do with Vulpix, nor did it have anything to do with Vulpix, so you got a 1 in the Guidelines category. That said, it looks like you put alot of work into it, and it was certainly of a good enough quality to be a decent parody song. Personally, I'd love to hear someone from Pokemon sing it!
Growlithe's Submission: POEM
Snowfall begins to cover the mountains at night fall.
Gently decorating the wooden cabin with drifts against the wall.
An aging Growlithe sits inside near a warming fireplace,
A sweet reminder of himself that he loved to embrace.
As every night, he sits and waits,
For the return of his Lady Master from the states.
Glancing at a picture of her on the wall.
“I’ll be right back,” she said as he would recall.
Many years have passed since her departure
And the long wait has been pure torture.
In a Pokémon Center, he and his companions were left in the best of hands.
She settled them down and explained her plans.
She spoke of her long trip, to and from.
“..please find me,” she spoke teasingly if she did not come.
Growlithe and the others were sure of her return,
Anxiously waiting for two weeks with concern.
The morning they were to go home came and gone.
Hopeful for a delay, they waited up until the dawn.
Days go by, and still she did not show.
They were worried and did not know.
Until one morning, an old man came to them
And said they would come with him.
He explained to them in a voice of sorrow,
She would not be back. Not today, nor tomorrow.
The Pokémon were sad for their master.
How could’ve happed such a disaster?
With time, adjustment took place.
Becoming content at their own pace.
The old man worked with them on their training
To ease their minds as they concentrated on the strength they were gaining.
He cares for them as much as she did,
But as time progressed, Growlithe’s bright spirit had dimmed.
Age was taking its toll.
The devastation eating away at his soul.
He needed to go on, but he wanted to say no.
His Lady Master, he just couldn’t let go.
To this day, Growlithe still clings to hope.
That his master would return from the continental slope.
Still, he recalls her words before her flight,
As he gazed into the fire that night.
“Okay, sweeties, while I’m gone, not too much TV,
I’ll be right back. And if not, please find me.”
“…….. please find me.”
And so it will be.
Running through the small door built for him,
Beginning a journey through the cold and the grim.
As the old man was watching through the window,
He could only see Growlithe’s dimming shadow.
He knew where Growlithe was going.
Later, he would retrieve him as it would continue snowing.
Growlithe retreated down the mountain,
Through the cozy town and by the fountain.
Passing several people in the snow,
Even on a ski-tow.
Growing tired rather quickly,
A fire-type Pokémon in the wet snow proved to be tricky.
Not as young as he used to be,
Age was definitely not making this easy.
But he would not stop.
He would continue passing shop after shop.
Growlithe needed to find his Lady Master.
So he ran even faster.
Reaching a flowing river of freezing water,
Carefully jumping from stone to stone to keep on his wander.
Running through bushes and countless trees,
As all of the plantation continues to freeze.
Now in his sight; a set of golden gates.
Behind them, a soul awaits.
Approaching the gates for a closer look,
As a strange pull was catching his heart like a fishing hook.
A long journey finally brings him to his destination.
Filling his soul with hope and anticipation.
Sniffing out for her scent in the air.
He knows she’s there.
Continuing on through that gates down the snow drifting path at a slow pace.
In the corner of his eye, he saw her face.
Standing tall, dressed brilliantly in white,
Her long dark hair flowing in the wind as her strong aura lit up the night.
Barking out his name several times in sheer happiness,
This truly was a moment of bliss.
Coming down to her knees, she smiled and said to her Pokémon lovingly,
“Growlithe, sweetheart! I’m so glad you found me!”
Growlithe ran to his master and leaped into her embrace.
Her laughter filled the air as she hugged her Pokémon as he happily licked her face.
The Pokémon felt as if he were a puppy again.
Lady Master’s warmth freed him of his aging pain.
Pain he once felt when his world was shattered.
Now that Lady Master is back, nothing else in the world mattered.
Growlithe rested upon his master’s knees.
His Lady Maser stoking his fur lovingly within the chilling breeze.
The cold air that was hitting them was not felt.
This joyous reunion was warm enough for the snow to melt.
“Growlithe,” she whispered, “I’ve missed you.”
A mur mur of his own name told her that he missed her, too.
A truck pulls up to the gates surrounded by the snow.
The old man steps out into the wind as it continues to blow.
Walking down the path that he had, unfortunately, known.
As expected, Growlithe was found resting peacefully against his daughter’s headstone.
-Sally A. Miller
Growlithe:
Effort: 25/25
Originality: 9/10
Quality: 5/5
Guidelines: 5/5
Curve: 4/5
Overall: 48/50
WOW, I was not expecting this. Not only was this poem absolutely well written, it was emotional and... just not something I was expecting. I had to give it a great score, it had some very decent length, effort and a sad originality to it that I haven't really thought could work with a Pokemon story. This was a real treat to read, and I was very surprised at how well this poem came across. The only thing that got hit was originality, since although the story was original, I felt it stranded slightly off from its Pokemon roots. But still, this was an AWESOME job.
Onix's Submission: Fanfic/Short Story
This story is about a few days in my life I will never forget, EVER.
So like any other day, I wake up in the morning and that elder Onix makes me breakfast. It’s a mix of Wiki Berries with some cool liquid stuff (I really don’t know what it is, but it taste soooo good!) So after that I get out of the tunnel and my day begins. So next to the Rock Tunnel is a bush of berries. The Berry Master plants new berries everyday so I don’t know what berry is here this time! I picked the berry and showed it to the elder Onix. She was like “OH MY WORD!” I was like “What???” Then she told me what kind of berry it was, she said it was the Enigma berry. So I was like cool, then I was about to eat it when….that elder Onix slapped me with her dang tail! Then she said that this is a very rare berry blab la blab la bla. So I kept it, and I decided that if it is such a cool berry then I should show my friends!
So I went for a little walk, saw some few trainers but none of them I guess wanted to battle so I just went peacefully when…a trainer came with a pokeball. So I quickly hid the Enigma berry behind a rock and stood my ground. The trainer throws the pokeball and a Jolteon appears! I could tell by my eyes that this was a rookie trainer. Jolteon used Thunderbolt quite a few times on me..did nothing to me so I gently used Rock throw on him and he fainted. I picked up the Enigma berry and just slithered..slithered..when I finally reached my friends house.
I came to the shore where my friend lives. There is a special way I call him. I throw a bunch of rocks in the water and he usually pops up. So I did my ritual when he used Water Gun on me. I feel back but got right up, “Hey Seadra!” “Hey Onix!” So I told him about the Enigma berry and like me, he never heard of it. So we decided to go to our other friends dad. He is quite the smarty. So we strolled along the beach where he is usually meditating and we found him. “Mr. Alakazam sir.” He stopped meditating and floating and talked to me and Seadra how important life is and blablablabla. Then I pulled out the Enigma berry and he, like the elder Onix was amazed and shocked. He said that I should cherish that forever and don’t let anyone take it from you. Then he said that it was very sacred to the Pokemon and you should not let any powerful pokemon see that. So then I knew that this berry was really something and not a snack. Then he said that it has a very magnificent power that no one knows about. Wowz. :/
So Seadra and I decided to talk to a few more friends. So I told Flareon,Growlithe and Vulpix at the Magma Cavern. I told my teacher Haunter at the Old Château. I told Jynx and Slowpoke who were drinking some water at the lake. Then I told Vileplume and the Meadow. Finally I told my 2nd best buddy Snorlax! So Snorlax was sleeping *shocker* so I told a random Weedle to use Poison Tail and he woke up! So I told him and like Seadra and I, he had no clue what this was. I accidentally dropped it and Snorlax was going to pick it up. I darted as fast as I could because he would have eaten this thing up. So I got it before him and I was relieved and Snorlax was pissed. J. It was getting late at night so I said bye to Snorlax and went back home.
Elder Onix was quite happy that I still had the berry with me and told me to hide it and go to sleep. So I went to bed and thought about the berry. What was the power of this berry? Did the Berry Master plant this? Who else would have? Should I tell anyone else?
The next morning I did the same old routine, woke up, ate breakfast, battled a few trainers. So I came to say hi to Seadra I threw some rocks at the water..no answer…tried it again…no answer. Then I heard a cry of a Seadra. I slithered as fast as I could and found him trapped by two pokemon! These were my enemies. Electrode and Mewtwo. I came with a loud roar and used horn attack on Electrode, Mewtwo deflected the attack and I came down to the ground. I was telling Electrode and Mewtwo what they wanted! They said that they overheard Seadra talking about the rare Enigma berry. Then, Mewtwo used Shadow Ball on me and I feel into the water! The Enigma berry was floating in the water. Suddenly, Seadra bursted out and took the Enigma berry and went under water. Mewtwo bravely dove in the get it. I washed up on shore still breathing for air. I had enough energy to sound one very large ROAR! All of my friends came to help me. Vulpix,Growlithe and Flareon took care of Electrode. When Mewtwo came up for air, Vileplume used Stun Spore and paralyzed him. Electrode’s Selfdestruct sent both of the Pokemon Flying. WE WERE SAVED!
We were all celebrating and all the pokemon were helping me when I realized that Seadra did not come back from underwater! Right when I said that a shining white light covered the whole water. When Seadra came out of the water..WAIT..that’s not Seadra…that’s a KINGDRA! Kingdra said that this is Seadra your friend. He told me that the Enigma berry allowed me to evolve.
So that was the power of the Enigma berry. It was awesome that my best friend is a Kingdra now. I told elder Onix and she was proud that Seadra evolved to. To celebrate this day elder Onix told me to bring some food to Kingdra! So I went used Rock Smash when a huge WATERFALL came into my face and sent me flying!! When I came back, Kingdra was sorry because he is not used to his strong powers yet. I gave him the grub and he was thankful.
Well this is my story and I will never forget it.
~Onix
Words:1150
Onix:
Effort: 25/25
Originality: 10/10
Quality: 3/5
Guidelines: 5/5
Curve: 4/5
Overall: 47/50 Points
This submission was a pretty cool story, with an interesting plot line. I really enjoyed how you managed to put in the other players of the game into the story, it brought a nice... I don't know, just a nice something extra. You had the most original entry I think, very nice. What you got hit in was quality, which I felt wasn't really up on par with the other entries in the challenge. Still, very good story.
Vileplume's Submission: POEM
Roses may be red
Violets possibly blue
Vileplume is most definitely sweet
And screw all of you
Vileplume:
Effort: 10/25
Originality: 5/10
Quality: 2/5
Guidelines: 5/5
Curve: 2/5
Overall: 24/50 Points
Not much I can say. While I'm happy you atleast tried, this was obviously the easy way out. It was... sorta cute, and it fits your personality... although obviously not much effort was put into it. Thanks for the submission, though, at least you tried.
Slowpoke's Submission: POEM
Sometimes female sometimes male
It's a Slowpoke
Slow like a turtle
Yet overcomes any hurdle
It's a Slowpoke
Team Rocket likes to hurt us
But we don't make a fuss
It's a Slowpoke
Attack with psychic, attack with water
In numbers never totter
It's a Slowpoke
An internet phenomenon
The very best Pokemon
It's a Slowpoke
Trainers love to use us
We dont let them abuse us
It's a Slowpoke
Best friend is Psyduck
Cause neither of us give a fuck
It's a Slowpoke
Shellder bite our heads and our tails
It feels a lot like nails
It's a Slowpoke
We can be bros and we can be kings
Never will have wings
It's a Slowpoke
Found in the Safari
Eat calamari
It's a Slowpoke.
Slowpoke:
Effort: 25/25
Originality: 9/10
Quality: 4/5
Guidelines: 5/5
Curve: 4/5
Overall: 47/50 Points
Very interesting poem , and it was certainly a good picture of what life as a Slowpoke is! I really enjoyed it, it was short, witty and funny, a good submission. Quality took a hit only because it was a bit repetitive and originality took a small hits too since I felt there wasn't too much substance to it. Overall though, it was a funny and witty poem that was a real fun read!
Flareon's submission: Fanfic/Short Story
Flareons Trial
It was a cold dark windy night and he felt the wind blowing through his fur as he worked his way up the mountain making him wonder if his master would be ok, it had been three days since he had gone missing in the mountains leaving Flareon at the pokécenter, after waiting a day for him to return Flareon decided to go look for him.
Looking around and feeling a little lost Flareon wondered over to some rocks beside the bottom of a cliff to settle down for a rest, as he was getting comfy he saw something out of the corner of his eye, as he wondered over to it to get a better look he reallised it was his masters cap no way it could be someone elses with that picture of Flareon on the front, as he looked around to spot the way he might of gone he saw a trail heading up along the edge of the cliff he walked over to it and noticed it had been walked under a day ago, Flareon knew he was getting close he had been searching the whole area for the past two days.
Even though he was feeling worn out and tired he thought of all the things his master had done for him, helping him evolve into Flareon for one and the battles they had fought and won as well as lost together, their bond becoming stronger and stronger with each battle, he couldn't just give up and rest now he had to find him before it was too late he knew anything could of happened and set off up the path.
As he neared the top of the cliff it gave him a view of the distance he'd travelled far off in the distance he could see the lights of the pokécenter and was suprised at how far he'd come in such a long time, he turned round and looked up towards the top of the mountain saw a light shining from near the peak after staring at it for awhile he decided to try and make his way up there.
Halfway up he started to feel a rumbling in the ground looking up he saw boulders hurtling toward him, no not boulders Golem's three of them to be exact, he franticly looked around searching for some place to hide from the incoming Golem's and saw a hole back the way he had come, he bolted for the hole barely diving in before the massive rock pokémon bounded overhead making his world shake alarmingly, he poked his head out of the hole wondering if the the mountain was still in one peice seeing that it was still standing and the light was still shining near the top he pressed on towards the peak.
As he neared the peak he saw the light was coming from a cave, he walked over to the entrance and poked his head round the edge wondering what he'd see, the inside of the cave was a mess food wrappers all over the floor and a blanket on the far wall, he started to move over to it when he suddenly felt like he was walking through mud getting slower and slower never reaching the bed the harder he tried the further away it felt just as the room started spinning round his head he felt himself lifted up just as everything faded to black, then suddenly there was a flash of light and he was lying in his bed at the pokécenter, he rolled over and saw his master looking at him with a puzzed expression on his face,
"are you alright Flareon?" he said
"it was dream?" Flareon thought "more like a nightmare"
he looked up at his master feeling relived it was a dream and not reallity, still remembering all the things he'd thought about in his dream and glad he hadn't given up he lept up onto his masters bed and snuggled up to sleep beside him.
"haha i guess so huh flareon?" he heard his master say as he fell asleep into a dream about all the past battles they'd fought and won together.
The End.
Flareon:
Effort: 25/25
Originality: 10/10
Quality: 3/5
Guidelines: 5/5
Curve: 4/5
Overall: 47/50 Points
Interesting short story. As one of only two to send in a truly unique story, you received full originality points. Overall the story was very good, it told a nice tale of a Flareon that one could see really happening (I personally like dream stories, too). Quality took a hit since some parts felt a bit rushed and lacked capitalization or it just didn't flow too well. Other then that, this story was very good and effort was obviously put into it!
Snorlax's Submission: OTHER (Song)
Feb 8, 2010 2:35:12 GMT -5 @Snorlax said:
(original lyrics: SIR MIX-A-LOT LYRICS - Baby Got Back )"Snorlax Got Back"
[Intro]
Oh, my, god. Pichu, look at her butt.
It is so big. *scoff* She looks like,
one of those rocket guys' pokemon.
But, Slowpoke, who understands those rocket guys? *scoff*
They only captured her, because,
she really likes to sleep a lot, 'kay?
I mean, her butt, is just so big.
I can't believe she's just so round,she's like,
out there, I mean - gross. Look!
She's just so ... fat!
[Sir Snores-a-Lot]
I like big butts and I can not lie
You pocket monsters can't deny
That when a girl walks by with a tubby wubby waist
And a round thing in your face
You evolve, wanna pull out your tough
'Cause you notice that path was blocked
Deep in the dreams she's dreaming
It's blocked, Pichu can't stop screaming
Oh Snorlax, I wanna wake you up
And keep on going
My trainer tried to warn me
But that butt you got makes me so horny
Ooh, Rump-o'-smooth-hide
You say you wanna get in my tribe?
Well, use me, use me
'Cause you ain't that average groupie
I've seen them plannin'
To hell with their schemin'
She's sweat, wet,
Got it goin' like a Wabafet
I'm tired of Pokedex
Sayin' Mudkips are the thing
Take the average Mewtwo and ask him that
She gotta pack much back
So, Oddish! (Odd!) Oddish! (Odd!)
Has your Snorlax got the badge? (Odd-ish!)
Tell 'em to use it! (Odd-ish!) Use it! (Odd-ish!)
Use that Cascade badge!
Snorlax got back!
(Snorlax comes from the Kanto Region)
Snorlax got back!
[Sir Snores-a-Lot]
I like 'em round, not small
And when I'm throwin' my ball
I just can't help myself, I'm actin' like a pokemon
Now here's my story-man
I wanna capture you
And ooo, Lugia, ooo, ooo
I ain't talkin' bout Blue Eyes
'Cause Yu-Gi-Oh cards are made for guys
I want 'em real fierce and stealthy
So find that stealthy Doduo
Pikachu's in trouble
Beggin' for a piece of that bubble
So I'm lookin' at rock Pokemon
Rock-type bimbos walkin' like Ho-Ohs
You can have them bimbos
I'll keep my Pokemon like Misty
A word to the thick Snorlaxes, I wanna get with yous
I won't cuss or hit yous
But I gotta be straight when I say I wanna fight
Till the break of dawn
Snorlax got it goin' on
A lot of Meowths won't like this song
'Cause them rockets like to hit it and quit it
And I'd rather stay and fight
'Cause I'm long, and I'm strong
And I'm down to get the battle on
So, Ditto! {Dit!} Ditto! {Dit!}
If you wanna roll in my Pokeball {Dit!}
Then turn into, a Snorlax!
Even Haunter's got to shout
Snorlax got back!
Snorlax got back!
Yeah, Snorlax ... when it comes to monsters, Giovanni ain't got nothin'
to do with my collection. Bulbasaur-Pidgeot-Charmander? Ha ha, only if you're level 3.
[Sir Snores-a-Lot]
So your trainer throws an Abra, playin' mind-tricks on my Seadra
But Seadra ain't got a worry about losing to Abra
My Kadabra don't want none
Unless you've got Golem
You can use Golduck or Mankey,
But please don't use Zubat
Some trainers wanna play Electrode
And tell you that Snorlax ain't gold
So they toss it and leave it
And I pull up quick to retrieve it
So Vulpix says you're fat
Well Jynx ain't down with that!
'Cause your waist is large and your moves are kickin'
And I'm thinkin' bout stickin'
To the good old days in videogames:
You've got Hitmonchans!
Caught me a Koffing, not a Weezing
Body Slam and crunch did miss her
Some team rocket tried to dis
'Cause Snorlax is on my list
She had game and she chose to hit 'em
And I pull up quick to finish 'em
So Snorlax, if the body is round,
And you want a survivor throw down,
Dial 143-SnoresALot (*note: say one forty-three, not one four three)
And kick them nasty punks
Snorlax got back!
Snorlax got back!
(Not little in the middle, Snorlax got back) [4x]
This song represents Snorlax because snorlax really does have back. I mean, HAVE YOU SEEN IT?! lmfao.
Snorlax:
Effort: 25/25
Originality: 8/10
Quality: 4/5
Guidelines: 5/5
Curve: 5/5
Overall: 47/50 Points
I really enjoyed this song, I thought it was veeeerry funny. It most certainly fits Snorlax, and I can tell you put alot of effort into 'Poke-rizing' the song. Don't know how many times I laughed during it/ Only things that dragged down your grade was that it was parody based off an existing song, and I mean, you didn't change the hook too much (Baby got Back to Snorlax got Back. I was sorta expect something a bit different). However, you set the stage for most effort put into the challenge and got a 5 on the curve on being able to parody an entire song, include many different pokemon, apply the theme of the challenge and above all, make it work. It was an awesome submission. Good job.
Vulpix's Submission: OTHER (Song)
Feb 8, 2010 2:35:12 GMT -5 @Vulpix said:
(based off Paparazzi by Lady Gaga)We are the team, and we're blasting off
James got his rose in his mouth, need that pikachu that the kids got
that rat's so strong
we would be so awesome
Attila and Hun, Cassidey and Butch
All think they're so great, but we will prove to them now
that we can succeed, we can catch rare pokemon
cause you know we can be...
we're your biggest threat we'll follow you until we catch you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
theres no other pokemon Giovanni wants you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
we might always fail, but we wont stop until our team prevails
pichu doesnt cut it, we'll chase you down until we catch you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
We got costumes, we can fool you with
you never know where we are, we can be right there beside you
you'll never know. Team Rocket will get you now.
That little brat, and his pikachu
have met the end of their days, we'll use our meowth balloon
for our get away, it will surely work this day...
cause Team Rocket will be...
we're your biggest threat we'll follow you until we catch you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
theres no other pokemon Giovanni wants you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
we might always fail, but we wont stop until out team prevails
pichu doesnt cut it, we'll chase you down until we catch you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
Dooooooou...ble trou-ble, thats what we're about.
Surrender now, or prepare to fight
we won't stop, for anyone
We're losers but we still have fun!
we're your biggest threat we'll follow you until we catch you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
theres no other pokemon Giovanni wants you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
we might always fail, but we wont stop until team rocket prevails
pichu doesnt cut it, we'll chase you down until we catch you
pika pika pika-pi-chu
Vulpix
Effort: 25/25
Originality: 7/10
Quality: 4/5
Guidelines: 1/5
Curve: 4/5
Overall: 41/50 Points
Well, the song parodied was Papparazi by Lady Gaga. For a parody, it did a pretty good job. However, you didn't tell how thing song had to do with Vulpix, nor did it have anything to do with Vulpix, so you got a 1 in the Guidelines category. That said, it looks like you put alot of work into it, and it was certainly of a good enough quality to be a decent parody song. Personally, I'd love to hear someone from Pokemon sing it!
Growlithe's Submission: POEM
Feb 8, 2010 2:35:12 GMT -5 @Growlithe said:
Lady Master Snowfall begins to cover the mountains at night fall.
Gently decorating the wooden cabin with drifts against the wall.
An aging Growlithe sits inside near a warming fireplace,
A sweet reminder of himself that he loved to embrace.
As every night, he sits and waits,
For the return of his Lady Master from the states.
Glancing at a picture of her on the wall.
“I’ll be right back,” she said as he would recall.
Many years have passed since her departure
And the long wait has been pure torture.
In a Pokémon Center, he and his companions were left in the best of hands.
She settled them down and explained her plans.
She spoke of her long trip, to and from.
“..please find me,” she spoke teasingly if she did not come.
Growlithe and the others were sure of her return,
Anxiously waiting for two weeks with concern.
The morning they were to go home came and gone.
Hopeful for a delay, they waited up until the dawn.
Days go by, and still she did not show.
They were worried and did not know.
Until one morning, an old man came to them
And said they would come with him.
He explained to them in a voice of sorrow,
She would not be back. Not today, nor tomorrow.
The Pokémon were sad for their master.
How could’ve happed such a disaster?
With time, adjustment took place.
Becoming content at their own pace.
The old man worked with them on their training
To ease their minds as they concentrated on the strength they were gaining.
He cares for them as much as she did,
But as time progressed, Growlithe’s bright spirit had dimmed.
Age was taking its toll.
The devastation eating away at his soul.
He needed to go on, but he wanted to say no.
His Lady Master, he just couldn’t let go.
To this day, Growlithe still clings to hope.
That his master would return from the continental slope.
Still, he recalls her words before her flight,
As he gazed into the fire that night.
“Okay, sweeties, while I’m gone, not too much TV,
I’ll be right back. And if not, please find me.”
“…….. please find me.”
And so it will be.
Running through the small door built for him,
Beginning a journey through the cold and the grim.
As the old man was watching through the window,
He could only see Growlithe’s dimming shadow.
He knew where Growlithe was going.
Later, he would retrieve him as it would continue snowing.
Growlithe retreated down the mountain,
Through the cozy town and by the fountain.
Passing several people in the snow,
Even on a ski-tow.
Growing tired rather quickly,
A fire-type Pokémon in the wet snow proved to be tricky.
Not as young as he used to be,
Age was definitely not making this easy.
But he would not stop.
He would continue passing shop after shop.
Growlithe needed to find his Lady Master.
So he ran even faster.
Reaching a flowing river of freezing water,
Carefully jumping from stone to stone to keep on his wander.
Running through bushes and countless trees,
As all of the plantation continues to freeze.
Now in his sight; a set of golden gates.
Behind them, a soul awaits.
Approaching the gates for a closer look,
As a strange pull was catching his heart like a fishing hook.
A long journey finally brings him to his destination.
Filling his soul with hope and anticipation.
Sniffing out for her scent in the air.
He knows she’s there.
Continuing on through that gates down the snow drifting path at a slow pace.
In the corner of his eye, he saw her face.
Standing tall, dressed brilliantly in white,
Her long dark hair flowing in the wind as her strong aura lit up the night.
Barking out his name several times in sheer happiness,
This truly was a moment of bliss.
Coming down to her knees, she smiled and said to her Pokémon lovingly,
“Growlithe, sweetheart! I’m so glad you found me!”
Growlithe ran to his master and leaped into her embrace.
Her laughter filled the air as she hugged her Pokémon as he happily licked her face.
The Pokémon felt as if he were a puppy again.
Lady Master’s warmth freed him of his aging pain.
Pain he once felt when his world was shattered.
Now that Lady Master is back, nothing else in the world mattered.
Growlithe rested upon his master’s knees.
His Lady Maser stoking his fur lovingly within the chilling breeze.
The cold air that was hitting them was not felt.
This joyous reunion was warm enough for the snow to melt.
“Growlithe,” she whispered, “I’ve missed you.”
A mur mur of his own name told her that he missed her, too.
A truck pulls up to the gates surrounded by the snow.
The old man steps out into the wind as it continues to blow.
Walking down the path that he had, unfortunately, known.
As expected, Growlithe was found resting peacefully against his daughter’s headstone.
-Sally A. Miller
Growlithe:
Effort: 25/25
Originality: 9/10
Quality: 5/5
Guidelines: 5/5
Curve: 4/5
Overall: 48/50
WOW, I was not expecting this. Not only was this poem absolutely well written, it was emotional and... just not something I was expecting. I had to give it a great score, it had some very decent length, effort and a sad originality to it that I haven't really thought could work with a Pokemon story. This was a real treat to read, and I was very surprised at how well this poem came across. The only thing that got hit was originality, since although the story was original, I felt it stranded slightly off from its Pokemon roots. But still, this was an AWESOME job.
Onix's Submission: Fanfic/Short Story
Feb 8, 2010 2:35:12 GMT -5 @Onix said:
My name is Onix, I am 14 years old and I live in the Rock Tunnel. I live an average life and do what other pokemon do. I have some good friends and some not good friends. I have never seen my mother and father ever in my life, and elder Onix told me that they went off with these 2 people. This story is about a few days in my life I will never forget, EVER.
So like any other day, I wake up in the morning and that elder Onix makes me breakfast. It’s a mix of Wiki Berries with some cool liquid stuff (I really don’t know what it is, but it taste soooo good!) So after that I get out of the tunnel and my day begins. So next to the Rock Tunnel is a bush of berries. The Berry Master plants new berries everyday so I don’t know what berry is here this time! I picked the berry and showed it to the elder Onix. She was like “OH MY WORD!” I was like “What???” Then she told me what kind of berry it was, she said it was the Enigma berry. So I was like cool, then I was about to eat it when….that elder Onix slapped me with her dang tail! Then she said that this is a very rare berry blab la blab la bla. So I kept it, and I decided that if it is such a cool berry then I should show my friends!
So I went for a little walk, saw some few trainers but none of them I guess wanted to battle so I just went peacefully when…a trainer came with a pokeball. So I quickly hid the Enigma berry behind a rock and stood my ground. The trainer throws the pokeball and a Jolteon appears! I could tell by my eyes that this was a rookie trainer. Jolteon used Thunderbolt quite a few times on me..did nothing to me so I gently used Rock throw on him and he fainted. I picked up the Enigma berry and just slithered..slithered..when I finally reached my friends house.
I came to the shore where my friend lives. There is a special way I call him. I throw a bunch of rocks in the water and he usually pops up. So I did my ritual when he used Water Gun on me. I feel back but got right up, “Hey Seadra!” “Hey Onix!” So I told him about the Enigma berry and like me, he never heard of it. So we decided to go to our other friends dad. He is quite the smarty. So we strolled along the beach where he is usually meditating and we found him. “Mr. Alakazam sir.” He stopped meditating and floating and talked to me and Seadra how important life is and blablablabla. Then I pulled out the Enigma berry and he, like the elder Onix was amazed and shocked. He said that I should cherish that forever and don’t let anyone take it from you. Then he said that it was very sacred to the Pokemon and you should not let any powerful pokemon see that. So then I knew that this berry was really something and not a snack. Then he said that it has a very magnificent power that no one knows about. Wowz. :/
So Seadra and I decided to talk to a few more friends. So I told Flareon,Growlithe and Vulpix at the Magma Cavern. I told my teacher Haunter at the Old Château. I told Jynx and Slowpoke who were drinking some water at the lake. Then I told Vileplume and the Meadow. Finally I told my 2nd best buddy Snorlax! So Snorlax was sleeping *shocker* so I told a random Weedle to use Poison Tail and he woke up! So I told him and like Seadra and I, he had no clue what this was. I accidentally dropped it and Snorlax was going to pick it up. I darted as fast as I could because he would have eaten this thing up. So I got it before him and I was relieved and Snorlax was pissed. J. It was getting late at night so I said bye to Snorlax and went back home.
Elder Onix was quite happy that I still had the berry with me and told me to hide it and go to sleep. So I went to bed and thought about the berry. What was the power of this berry? Did the Berry Master plant this? Who else would have? Should I tell anyone else?
The next morning I did the same old routine, woke up, ate breakfast, battled a few trainers. So I came to say hi to Seadra I threw some rocks at the water..no answer…tried it again…no answer. Then I heard a cry of a Seadra. I slithered as fast as I could and found him trapped by two pokemon! These were my enemies. Electrode and Mewtwo. I came with a loud roar and used horn attack on Electrode, Mewtwo deflected the attack and I came down to the ground. I was telling Electrode and Mewtwo what they wanted! They said that they overheard Seadra talking about the rare Enigma berry. Then, Mewtwo used Shadow Ball on me and I feel into the water! The Enigma berry was floating in the water. Suddenly, Seadra bursted out and took the Enigma berry and went under water. Mewtwo bravely dove in the get it. I washed up on shore still breathing for air. I had enough energy to sound one very large ROAR! All of my friends came to help me. Vulpix,Growlithe and Flareon took care of Electrode. When Mewtwo came up for air, Vileplume used Stun Spore and paralyzed him. Electrode’s Selfdestruct sent both of the Pokemon Flying. WE WERE SAVED!
We were all celebrating and all the pokemon were helping me when I realized that Seadra did not come back from underwater! Right when I said that a shining white light covered the whole water. When Seadra came out of the water..WAIT..that’s not Seadra…that’s a KINGDRA! Kingdra said that this is Seadra your friend. He told me that the Enigma berry allowed me to evolve.
So that was the power of the Enigma berry. It was awesome that my best friend is a Kingdra now. I told elder Onix and she was proud that Seadra evolved to. To celebrate this day elder Onix told me to bring some food to Kingdra! So I went used Rock Smash when a huge WATERFALL came into my face and sent me flying!! When I came back, Kingdra was sorry because he is not used to his strong powers yet. I gave him the grub and he was thankful.
Well this is my story and I will never forget it.
~Onix
Words:1150
Onix:
Effort: 25/25
Originality: 10/10
Quality: 3/5
Guidelines: 5/5
Curve: 4/5
Overall: 47/50 Points
This submission was a pretty cool story, with an interesting plot line. I really enjoyed how you managed to put in the other players of the game into the story, it brought a nice... I don't know, just a nice something extra. You had the most original entry I think, very nice. What you got hit in was quality, which I felt wasn't really up on par with the other entries in the challenge. Still, very good story.
Vileplume's Submission: POEM
Feb 8, 2010 2:35:12 GMT -5 @Vileplume said:
Vileplume:Roses may be red
Violets possibly blue
Vileplume is most definitely sweet
And screw all of you
Vileplume:
Effort: 10/25
Originality: 5/10
Quality: 2/5
Guidelines: 5/5
Curve: 2/5
Overall: 24/50 Points
Not much I can say. While I'm happy you atleast tried, this was obviously the easy way out. It was... sorta cute, and it fits your personality... although obviously not much effort was put into it. Thanks for the submission, though, at least you tried.
Slowpoke's Submission: POEM
Feb 8, 2010 2:35:12 GMT -5 @Slowpoke said:
Long coveted pink tailSometimes female sometimes male
It's a Slowpoke
Slow like a turtle
Yet overcomes any hurdle
It's a Slowpoke
Team Rocket likes to hurt us
But we don't make a fuss
It's a Slowpoke
Attack with psychic, attack with water
In numbers never totter
It's a Slowpoke
An internet phenomenon
The very best Pokemon
It's a Slowpoke
Trainers love to use us
We dont let them abuse us
It's a Slowpoke
Best friend is Psyduck
Cause neither of us give a fuck
It's a Slowpoke
Shellder bite our heads and our tails
It feels a lot like nails
It's a Slowpoke
We can be bros and we can be kings
Never will have wings
It's a Slowpoke
Found in the Safari
Eat calamari
It's a Slowpoke.
Slowpoke:
Effort: 25/25
Originality: 9/10
Quality: 4/5
Guidelines: 5/5
Curve: 4/5
Overall: 47/50 Points
Very interesting poem , and it was certainly a good picture of what life as a Slowpoke is! I really enjoyed it, it was short, witty and funny, a good submission. Quality took a hit only because it was a bit repetitive and originality took a small hits too since I felt there wasn't too much substance to it. Overall though, it was a funny and witty poem that was a real fun read!
Flareon's submission: Fanfic/Short Story
Feb 8, 2010 2:35:12 GMT -5 @Flareon said:
Hiya did a short story for mine here it is:Flareons Trial
It was a cold dark windy night and he felt the wind blowing through his fur as he worked his way up the mountain making him wonder if his master would be ok, it had been three days since he had gone missing in the mountains leaving Flareon at the pokécenter, after waiting a day for him to return Flareon decided to go look for him.
Looking around and feeling a little lost Flareon wondered over to some rocks beside the bottom of a cliff to settle down for a rest, as he was getting comfy he saw something out of the corner of his eye, as he wondered over to it to get a better look he reallised it was his masters cap no way it could be someone elses with that picture of Flareon on the front, as he looked around to spot the way he might of gone he saw a trail heading up along the edge of the cliff he walked over to it and noticed it had been walked under a day ago, Flareon knew he was getting close he had been searching the whole area for the past two days.
Even though he was feeling worn out and tired he thought of all the things his master had done for him, helping him evolve into Flareon for one and the battles they had fought and won as well as lost together, their bond becoming stronger and stronger with each battle, he couldn't just give up and rest now he had to find him before it was too late he knew anything could of happened and set off up the path.
As he neared the top of the cliff it gave him a view of the distance he'd travelled far off in the distance he could see the lights of the pokécenter and was suprised at how far he'd come in such a long time, he turned round and looked up towards the top of the mountain saw a light shining from near the peak after staring at it for awhile he decided to try and make his way up there.
Halfway up he started to feel a rumbling in the ground looking up he saw boulders hurtling toward him, no not boulders Golem's three of them to be exact, he franticly looked around searching for some place to hide from the incoming Golem's and saw a hole back the way he had come, he bolted for the hole barely diving in before the massive rock pokémon bounded overhead making his world shake alarmingly, he poked his head out of the hole wondering if the the mountain was still in one peice seeing that it was still standing and the light was still shining near the top he pressed on towards the peak.
As he neared the peak he saw the light was coming from a cave, he walked over to the entrance and poked his head round the edge wondering what he'd see, the inside of the cave was a mess food wrappers all over the floor and a blanket on the far wall, he started to move over to it when he suddenly felt like he was walking through mud getting slower and slower never reaching the bed the harder he tried the further away it felt just as the room started spinning round his head he felt himself lifted up just as everything faded to black, then suddenly there was a flash of light and he was lying in his bed at the pokécenter, he rolled over and saw his master looking at him with a puzzed expression on his face,
"are you alright Flareon?" he said
"it was dream?" Flareon thought "more like a nightmare"
he looked up at his master feeling relived it was a dream and not reallity, still remembering all the things he'd thought about in his dream and glad he hadn't given up he lept up onto his masters bed and snuggled up to sleep beside him.
"haha i guess so huh flareon?" he heard his master say as he fell asleep into a dream about all the past battles they'd fought and won together.
The End.
Flareon:
Effort: 25/25
Originality: 10/10
Quality: 3/5
Guidelines: 5/5
Curve: 4/5
Overall: 47/50 Points
Interesting short story. As one of only two to send in a truly unique story, you received full originality points. Overall the story was very good, it told a nice tale of a Flareon that one could see really happening (I personally like dream stories, too). Quality took a hit since some parts felt a bit rushed and lacked capitalization or it just didn't flow too well. Other then that, this story was very good and effort was obviously put into it!
